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Wednesday, 22 April 2020

My story 2

Hi viewers, 

Today I am posting my story. This is about a story a sheriff was going to party. Here my awesome I have done. 

                                                                       Party Hero:
Nick was invited to the biggest party ever. Nick was a sheriff, he was invited because he kept everybody be safe. Nick was going to an alleyway to go to the party. He looked behind him and saw someone who was following him. The guy fired a gun. Nick dogged it and he killed him.When he killed the person a lot people tied Nick and put a paper bag to his head. He was tied inside at a warehouse if he didn’t escape for 5 minutes the warehouse will explode. When he said that Nick untied the rope he talked to the walkie talkie to come here. All the sheriff on the town went to the warehouse and arrested all the people Nick finally went to the party. The next day he turned into a special sheriff.


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2 comments:

  1. Renz!
    Great work posting your narrative. This is such an exciting action story. It makes me think that Nick wanted to be kidnapped and taken to the warehouse so that the sheriff's depart could arrest all the criminals ( bad guys) and not just the man who shot at Nick.
    You can extend your story by describing some of the characters. What do they look like? How are they feeling in these exciting and terrifying moments? What are some things they might be saying to each other.

    Thank you for sharing your story. You are a great author and enjoyed reading your narrative!
    :) Miss D

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  2. Hi Renz. There are some very creative writers in your class, you being one of them! I was thinking when you add to your story it would be good to be in paragraphs. This would make it easier to read.I think it's good that the good guy came out on top!

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