Can I Fix This Writing ??? (surface features )

Kumusta readers,

Welcome back to my blog !  This week were going to learn surface features. Surface features is like little thing in your writing to make it correct like. Putting full stop on a sentences, spelling and punctuation. Why we have to do this ? Because if you you don't use surface features it might look like this. Here a example. 

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If you use surface features, this sentences actually make sense. But is really hard to read. 

On our room 9 writing site our teacher put a link to a story. The story doesn't have surface features. We did to make a copy of the document and read on the top of the document to us what to do. The first part we did to find the end of the sentences and put a full stop and put the capital letter on the start of the sentences. The second part we highlighted the most repeated word and change it. The final part we need to find how many sentences start the same way. Unfortunately I didn't get to do it because I run out of time. Here my work. 

Without surface features 

He kept absolutely still as the footsteps got louder he tried not to suffocate as he laid under the bed he was wondering what had happened to his brother and his family. The man with the knife in his hand stormed around the house. Mums had boyfriends before but we had not thought that they would ever find us maybe he was one of them looking for revenge but why would he come. mum would just move and how did he find us we live on the other side of the planet from where all of mums boyfriends were so how could he find us he might have put a tracker on mum when he last saw her or on one of the devises ‘Hello where are you I know your here you're going to tell me where you're mother is or you shall join your father... in the skies so which will it be death or freedom you have 10 seconds chose wisely’.

With surface features that I changed 

He kept absolutely still as the footsteps got louder. Her son tried not to suffocate as he laid under his bed. Then he was wondering. What had happened to his brother and his family ? A man with a knife in his hand stormed around our house. e

Mum’s has boyfriends before but we had not thought that they would ever find us. Maybe he was one of them looking for revenge, but why would her ex come ? Mum would just move. How did her ex find us? We live on the other side of the planet. From where all of mum’s boyfriends were. So how could The man find us. The ex might have put a tracker on mum ? when he last saw her or on one of mum’s devices.

 “Hello where are you ? I know you’re here. You’re going to tell me where your mother is or you shall join your father... into the skies. So which will it be, death or freedom ! You have ten seconds choose wisely.”

Do you think surface features help your writing ? Make sure you comment down below. Thank you and have a wonderful day.