My Writing On Term 4

 Kumusta welcome back to my blog,

Today I will be showing you two of my writing. One of them is my failed writing. Why is it a failed writing? Well let me explain. I was trying to make a simile and a hyperbole rap. The rap tells you some simile and hyperbole. When I was starting to make the writing I search up what rhymes with simile and hyperbole. I used the rhyming words to do my rap about it. When I made the first line it didn't make sense. When I got up on seven line I give up because it was to hard and people won't understand it.   

Then I restarted my writing and made a story about. a mysterious stone that can gain power landed on my house. I didn't have enough time to finished.  But I learnt something. You can learn from your mistake and I was able to use more language features in my story.

Here's my writing. 

“COOK COOK COOK” My alarm went off.

I grab my book and throw it at the alarm. Luckily I missed. I slowly stand up like a sloth. Suddenly I heard a powerful whistle. It was getting louder. I felt my ears falling off. Suddenly a shock wave hit my house

“ ZZZZZ BOOM”

I was flying when it hit me. I slammed the wall and I saw a weird object was on the floor. I quickly crawled to it like a baby checking it out. The object opened and a purple rock was inside of it. A letter was on it and read it like a flash. It said. You're the chosen one, grab this rock and restore the balance of the world. I squeezed it. Then it shattered like glass. I said to myself

“ How do I restore balance of the world when I don’t have anything use” I questioned myself

Suddenly I felt a huge pain in my body. 

Simile and Hyperbole rap/fail

Emily was using a simile, with her family, her smile was, our tree was high like a skyscraper, Emily still using a simile, She said I was slow like a sloth, But she learned hyperbole because it was similar like a simile. Emily said she could light up a town by her smile, her hyperbole was perfectly.

Thank for checking out on my blog and make sure you comment that you had the same problem as me and learn from your mistakes. Thank you and have good weekend!