Today me and and my class will be showing what we did in are writing. This term we been learning how to write a strong narrative. There are three things to write a strong narrative is it has to be believable, descriptive and to be consistent. Then we learn about sick sentences. It means we changed boring sentences into strong descriptive sentences.
This one of the boring sentences :
I was scared
I was scared that I violently shook.
The story is about a girl who touch a mirror that is evil. Here the photo and the work I have\
but it is not finish.
Anna went home after a soccer match. She was tried but her mom didn’t believe her. Her mom said
“Clean the attic”
“But mom i’m tried” Anna said
“ No, clean it ! You never clean your room, there like a tornado went to your room” Mom said
Anna went to the attic and started to clean. She washed her hands 13 times because it was disgusting . She put all the stuff in the garage and now she's finished. Until she saw a mirror, she told to herself
“That’s weird why is the mirror clean and not dirty”
She didn’t bother to tell her mom, she Instead to keep it. She touched the mirror and it felt like water, it was cold to her finger and it was like pulling her to the mirror. She got her finger out of the mirror. Suddenly her spine and hands are starting to shake. She fell down to the wooden hard ground and she shook violently and floated. Her mom went to the attic and Anna grabbed her and opened the window really hard that the window almost popped out, then she threw her. Luckily she landed on the mattress and she was okay . She remembered that the mirror is still in the attic and Anna touched it now she cursed with evil. Anna jumped to the balcony and landed in her mom’s car. She went inside of it and drove to a tree. Anna jumped out on the window and she landed in the neighbor's pool and the car was destroyed. Then the car exploded to a million pieces. The mom went back to the house and checked all the books that kill a curse. Then the mom has an idea. The only thing that can kill this curse, is doing what they love. But Anna did do be unconscious. She took a sleeping pill and started to find Anna. She looked for hours but she couldn't find her. She almost gave up until she heard a loud scream.
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